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Tyrith · 02-06-2007, 12:57 PM

I'd stick to 5/7/5 haiku if you can.

The acrostic is pretty decent, but the last two lines feel kind of weak -- there's no real action behind them. I don't have any ideas on how to fix it, though, so maybe I should be quiet.

02-06-2007, 12:57 PM	#117
Tyrith College Starter Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Houston, TX	I'd stick to 5/7/5 haiku if you can. The acrostic is pretty decent, but the last two lines feel kind of weak -- there's no real action behind them. I don't have any ideas on how to fix it, though, so maybe I should be quiet.