*~* Party In The USA*~* A GJ Production (NHL10 BAP)

[gibbey9]

Quote: Originally Posted by GoldenJet

Well, there's a waste of a post.

Well there's a waste of a reply to a waste of a post. -__-

[shinderhizzle84]

hey, haha, not bad.

Only thing I would suggest, and this, for some reason, occurs with all your BAP's, but you tend to write it like your player is ALWAYS the best player on the team, or whatever, and no offense, but whenever you write a coach, it REALLY BOTHERS ME. I know I'd KILL my coach if he picked a favorite....I would play ****ty for him on purpose...it's the same deal with QB's in football who insult their offensive linemen--who the hell is going to want to play for a coach who doesn't give a **** about the rest of the team?

Maybe you could incorporate that in the near future? Like have a big team fight because they're sick of your characters ego, and don't like how everybody thinks he's the only member of the team, and he NEVER does anything to stop it?

Also, did you mean for the girl character to be captain?? Because that's what the PA announcer shouted, haha.

Other than that, great job, with every BAP you start, you seem to be getting better and better, haha.

[GoldenJet]

Quote: Originally Posted by shinderhizzle84

hey, haha, not bad. Only thing I would suggest, and this, for some reason, occurs with all your BAP's, but you tend to write it like your player is ALWAYS the best player on the team, or whatever, and no offense, but whenever you write a coach, it REALLY BOTHERS ME. I know I'd KILL my coach if he picked a favorite....I would play ****ty for him on purpose...it's the same deal with QB's in football who insult their offensive linemen--who the hell is going to want to play for a coach who doesn't give a **** about the rest of the team? Maybe you could incorporate that in the near future? Like have a big team fight because they're sick of your characters ego, and don't like how everybody thinks he's the only member of the team, and he NEVER does anything to stop it? Also, did you mean for the girl character to be captain?? Because that's what the PA announcer shouted, haha. Other than that, great job, with every BAP you start, you seem to be getting better and better, haha.

This is such a giggle/giggle moment for what I have planned.

[rocknrolla13]

haha lol

good job.