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  • rocknrolla13
    Rookie
    • Jun 2009
    • 230

    #1

    Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

    ACT ONE: The Beginning
    PART ONE: Insomniac

    *4:30am*

    Can’t sleep. Three nights in a row. Game tomorrow. Why the hell did Coach tell me about that Scout?
    I’ve been surviving on coffee and energy drinks, I think I have insomnia. Once seven o’clock comes around, I get out of my bed, out of my room. I put the kettle on and search the freezer for some toaster waffles. Cody was still asleep, dozing off, without worry of tonight.
    I go into the room across mine and give him a little slap on the cheek.
    ‘Get up man, we have a meeting in two hours’
    ‘Alright, alright. Warm me up some breakfast.’ He grumbled.
    I walked out and poured the water from the kettle. This should be a long meeting.

    *11:55am*

    ‘I don’t see why we have to have this meeting, man. I told you, it’s just like any other game, except with one extra person in the crowd’ Cody said, getting out of the Dodge.
    ‘C’mon man. You must be a little worried.’
    ‘Nope, I’ve faced scouts before. Most of them are blind anyway.’ We jogged up the step to the doors of the arena. ‘Would you be freaking out if a celebrity was in the audience, just simply writing a review? Like Britney Spears?’
    ‘Ew, no.’ I commented.
    ‘There you go’
    We got into the staff room of the McCormick Arena here in Toronto, where some other guys from the team have arrived. Rick, Perry, Joe, and a few others. They were pretty good guys, except they complained to much, and are way too cocky.
    After a few moments, the rest of the Toronto Moose show up. Such a lame name, but hey, I’ll be leaving here soon. I think.
    ‘Alright team,’ Coach began, ‘As you know, tonight we are playing the Niagra Falls Canucks. But I lied. There will not be a talent scout there tonight.’
    What? God damnit! There was mumbles from the team.
    ‘There will be three’
    What? God damnit! More mumbles. How? Why?
    ‘One from the Toronto Marlies, one from Quad City Flames, for Calgary.’
    ‘And the third?’ Perry asked.
    ‘Don’t interrupt me!’ Coach snapped. ‘The last is from Norfolk Admirals, for Tampa Bay. Good luck out there tonight. The rink is open for all-day practice if you need it’
    How the hell did this happen? Oh no, can me and Cody be separated? We are a unit, a team within a team. We pull the best plays together!
    Even Cody looked pissed now. A little uncomfortable too.
    ‘Let’s go get our bags, bro. Come back and practise’ He said, glaring at Coach.
    Cody was kind of hot-headed, but so was I. We wouldn’t back down from a fight, and maybe even start a few. I agreed as we headed out after everyone else. I heard coach stumbled behind us.
    ‘Guys, wait. I want to tell you something.’
    We turned. ‘Yeah?’
    ‘You two are probably the best players I have on the team, and as a unit you’re even better. Whatever team you’re drafted to, you should be drafted together. The scouts should see that, and will fight for you guys. Both of you. Good luck’
    ‘Thanks Coach’ We walked out back to the truck for the short drive there and back. It was kind of quiet, in realization that we might have to move. Or wait for the Marlies’ scout again.
    We quickly ran to the closet and grabbed our bags, threw them in the back of the truck and sped away down the road again. Getting dressed quickly, we slid out on the ice, stick in hand heading down towards the shooting frenzy.
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    Meet Billy Joe Killer - The drama and the dream.
  • Bolts_26
    MVP
    • Jan 2009
    • 2653

    #2
    re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

    Nice Start!!!

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    • shinderhizzle84
      Banned
      • Nov 2008
      • 1836

      #3
      re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

      Originally posted by Bolts_26
      Nice Start!!!
      agreed. if only he could get rid of the 5,000 smiley faces.

      maybe he should PM derrickthomas58 asking him how he did his? I forgot what he did, but DT definitely fixed it.

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      • Bolts_26
        MVP
        • Jan 2009
        • 2653

        #4
        re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

        Originally posted by shinderhizzle84
        agreed. if only he could get rid of the 5,000 smiley faces.

        maybe he should PM derrickthomas58 asking him how he did his? I forgot what he did, but DT definitely fixed it.
        Yes, I do remember that.

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        • alex96
          Pro
          • Aug 2007
          • 721

          #5
          re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

          Its because he copied and pasted it from MS Word. You should probably just write your stories on notepad, then copy+paste and make your bold/italicized/underline changes on OS.
          Fans of: Braves, Falcons, Lakers, Angels, USC Trojans
          (call me a bandwagon if you want to :D)
          GT: alexguy96
          PSN: alexsportsguy (lame but whatever)

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          • shinderhizzle84
            Banned
            • Nov 2008
            • 1836

            #6
            re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

            Originally posted by alex96
            Its because he copied and pasted it from MS Word. You should probably just write your stories on notepad, then copy+paste and make your bold/italicized/underline changes on OS.
            yeah. I do all of mine from OpenOffice, which is a freeware version of microsoft suite. You can get powerpoint, and frontpage, and word and excel and all that jazz for absolutely free, but with only like 1 or 2 different, probably better, features.

            The official home page of the Apache OpenOffice open source project, home of OpenOffice Writer, Calc, Impress, Draw and Base.


            since I'm too cheap/poor to justify paying the 100 dollars or whatever it is these days for Word, I just downloaded that, and have all of the major microsoft suite applications, but with a different name and whatnot. It's great, and I'd highly recommend it to anyone who is considering getting something like microsoft word or excel or anything.

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            • rocknrolla13
              Rookie
              • Jun 2009
              • 230

              #7
              re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

              so i take it that its not fixed? damn....

              I'll try from Notepad...and i have OpenOffice, Notepad, and Word'07
              Meet Billy Joe Killer - The drama and the dream.

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              • shinderhizzle84
                Banned
                • Nov 2008
                • 1836

                #8
                re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

                Originally posted by rocknrolla13
                so i take it that its not fixed? damn....

                I'll try from Notepad...and i have OpenOffice, Notepad, and Word'07
                fixed. it works now, bro.

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                • Bolts_26
                  MVP
                  • Jan 2009
                  • 2653

                  #9
                  re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

                  Originally posted by shinderhizzle84
                  fixed. it works now, bro.
                  Yup.

                  It looks fab now

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                  • rocknrolla13
                    Rookie
                    • Jun 2009
                    • 230

                    #10
                    re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

                    excellent!......next section up tonight!
                    Meet Billy Joe Killer - The drama and the dream.

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                    • shinderhizzle84
                      Banned
                      • Nov 2008
                      • 1836

                      #11
                      re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

                      Originally posted by rocknrolla13
                      excellent!......next section up tonight!
                      nice. also, what's up with the part about the act 1, scene 1??

                      haha kind of weird....but whatever, it's your BAP.

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                      • Bolts_26
                        MVP
                        • Jan 2009
                        • 2653

                        #12
                        re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

                        Originally posted by shinderhizzle84
                        nice. also, what's up with the part about the act 1, scene 1??

                        haha kind of weird....but whatever, it's your BAP.
                        Nothing wrong with that...

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                        • rocknrolla13
                          Rookie
                          • Jun 2009
                          • 230

                          #13
                          re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

                          keep it organized, keep it original (thats important for me)

                          and easier to refer to then saying 'i like the one, a few posts back with the dude doing the thing'
                          you can say 'i liked part 3'

                          and screw this, i cant wait...next one up soon! (i hope it doesnt screw up this time!)
                          Meet Billy Joe Killer - The drama and the dream.

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                          • rocknrolla13
                            Rookie
                            • Jun 2009
                            • 230

                            #14
                            re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

                            PART TWO:
                            'Game Start'

                            *7:15pm*

                            Cars flood into the parking lot, and people flow into the building. They swarm the lobby, washrooms, and food counters. We hear them talking about some trophies and some photos. Any three of them could be the ones.
                            ‘So, how do guys feel about the scouts out there tonight?’ Kristy asked us. She was one of three female friends we were talking with.
                            ‘Little stressed’ Cody replied. I nodded in agreement.
                            ‘Oh, would you like me to massage your muscles? It helps you relax’ Kristy always was into Cody.
                            ‘No thank you’ He said with a smile.
                            Hayley was kind of new to the group; this was the first game she was going to see us play. She had brown hair, usually straight, and was dressed in a short jean skirt, halfway down her thigh. She always had a more of a Punk kind of style.
                            ‘So what are your numbers again?’ She asked.
                            ‘Nine’ Cody said.
                            ‘..Thirteen’ I replied after swallowing a big gulp of an energy drink.
                            ‘Alright. Thanks. Now I can track you guys out on the ice.’ She said, looking in my eyes.
                            I pulled off my hooded sweater I was wearing and handed it to her.
                            ‘Use that if you get cold. If you’re not skating, it’s freezing in there’
                            ‘I have a sweater’ She said, holding it out to me to take back.
                            ‘I know’ I pushed it to her. ‘I meant as a blanket, for your legs’ I looked down at the bare space between her thigh and her ankles.
                            So does she. ‘Oh. Thanks.’
                            ‘Anytime’
                            Cody crushes his can of coke and tosses it in the trash behind him. ‘We should get dressed, bro’
                            ‘Yeah man.’ I look at my half-full can of Monster Energy Drink. ‘Want it?’ I ask the girls.
                            They all scrunched their noses in disgust and protest. Except Hayley. She grabbed it from my hand ‘Sure. Good luck’
                            ‘Thanks’
                            We walk into the locker room and grab our stuff from our bags. We talk about how Kristy is constantly hitting on him. Then he turns the tables and starts talking about me an d Hayley. Then the rest of the guys come in and the topic changes to: What the hell is going to happen tonight?

                            *8:00pm*


                            The music blares out and the teams hit the ice. And looky over there. Middle of the ride side of the rink, three guys, black suits, ties, briefcases chatting with the ref. The scouts have been scouted.
                            Meet Billy Joe Killer - The drama and the dream.

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                            • shinderhizzle84
                              Banned
                              • Nov 2008
                              • 1836

                              #15
                              re: Billy Joe Killer: ~*13 Minutes Of Fame*~ (NHL 09 BAP/Story)

                              nice update, bro. One word of suggestion, though:

                              whenever you have a new paragraph or line break or when there's a conversation going, make sure you use two spaces and not one. It makes it easier to read, and also makes it look a little longer :P

                              Other than that, I really like it! Also, what's up with drinking monster before the game? you're going to stink out there after the 1st period!!!

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